Wednesday, January 6, 2010

Stepping Out, A Tanka Poem


Stepping Out

Layoffs and furloughs,
Daughter flying far from home,
A good friend’s coma—
Many unwelcome changes.
Still,  clouds glowed rose at sunset.

19 comments:

Delwyn said...

Hi dan
things continue to change and too they stay the same...
Another lovely tanka. You have sorrows amongst beauty.
I am writing haiku as I walk in the early morning so will challenge myself to a tanka tomorrow.
My best wishes for your friend
happy days

jinksy said...

It is good that some things remain the same, even in the midst of changes...

Bonnie, Original Art Studio said...

Life offers comfort as it imposes change. A lovely pairing Dan. Thank you for sharing.

Jenny Stevning said...

What is it about the sky? Watching the sky, even for a moment, has brought me great solace during times that life seems to swirl, flip-flop and change too fast for my liking.
The tanka poem is very pleasing to me. I like the syllabic structure: more to work with than in a haiku but still short and sweet. In just a few lines you can express and reveal a wide range of emotions...express the oddities of life...I LOVE IT!
Thank you, Dan! Love to your friend...

steven said...

hello dan. finding the beauty in the midst of change and challenge is a huge gift!! thankyou for this. steven

Bagman and Butler said...

A whole lot said and felt in a small space!
By the way, while commenting I looked over at the wisdom-love you wrote in About Me. That's pretty good stuff for me to remember today!

spldbch said...

Everything changes, and yet everything stays the same:-)

Delwyn said...

Hello Dan

A reader called Anon left an interesting comment for you regarding Kahlil Gibran and the Baha'i faith on my 'Behold' post.

Happy days

Dan Gurney said...

Hi, Delwyn. I wish you good luck with the Tanka poem. I find the Tanka form very satisfying to work within. Definitely brief, but not as terse as haiku which is too challenging for run-on me.

Thanks for the heads-up about the comment on Gibran on your blog.

Dan Gurney said...

Jinksy and Bonnie, thank you. My observation is that everything changes. Fortunately not so much so that we lose our bearings entirely.

Dan Gurney said...

Hi, Jenny. In your hands, I imagine the Tanka form might work miracles.

Dan Gurney said...

steven: exactly. I think you offer a good example of exactly that skill. It keeps me coming back to your blog.

Dan Gurney said...

Mark, thank you. That's not an original quotation of mine, but one I got from I am That. I should attribute it, but I'm not sure enough of its source.

Dan Gurney said...

spldbch. Yes. But everything mostly changes. I think our nervous systems create an illusion of things remaining the same when it ain't actually so.

The Pollinatrix said...

It seems like your posts recently are always inspiring some sort of biblical connection for me - this one makes me think of the book of Job. That when God finally shows up all he does is point Job to the magnificence of Creation.

Dan Gurney said...

Well, I was raised Christian. So it's kind of marbled throughout me.

The Pollinatrix said...

That expression, "marbled" always makes me think of the fat in meat. So the meat is Buddhism and the fat is Christianity? I'm seriously amused by this analogy.

Dan Gurney said...

Yes, that's what I was thinking when I chose the word. I suppose I could have used the word insinuated, as well. Different traditions can obscure the actual reality and try to claim it as their own. Experience is human experience, and doesn't belong to one religious group or another.

The Pollinatrix said...

Very well put, and I am in complete agreement. I like the way knowledge of different traditions can enhance each other. And keep us from getting stuck in the Truth-In-A-Box syndrome.

It's just funny to me to make a Buddhism analogy that reeks so strongly of meat! It's like a koan, almost.