Sunday, February 21, 2010

Fault-finding Finger, A Cinquain

When I
Point out your faults
I don't see three fingers
Middle, ring, pinky pointing back
At me.

—Dan Gurney



I invite you to join the fun. Try it, you may like it.

A Cinquain is a 5-line poetic form inspired by Haiku and Tanka but adapted to English by the American poet Adelaide Crapsey. Cinquain poetry has achieved a following over the years. In its basic form, a Cinquain's five lines display a syllabic count of 2-4-6-8-2.

10 comments:

Kamala said...

I try to keep this in mind when I become critical of those around me. It can be very tough to realise what you're doing before it's too late or when others around you are taking part.

Dan Gurney said...

Hi, Kamala, thanks for stopping by Mindful Heart. One thing that I sometimes do if I hear people speaking critically about someone is either to keep very silent, or point out a good quality that the person has. When you do that, it really interrupts the criticisms.

I looked at your blog... you're a survivor; I admire you.

steven said...

knowing
you as i do
fellow traveller, learner
teacher, brother, sister,
father, mother, friend, teacher:
my friend.

steven

Dave King said...

I had got as far as noting down the essentials - haven't got to writing one yet, but I will. I agree they sound fun.

Kamala said...

Thanks Dan. I try to keep silent and stick up for the other person when I can. It gets tough when there's peer pressure.

Dan Gurney said...

steven, what a great way to comment! Thank you for commenting via cinquain, my good blogger friend.

Dan Gurney said...

Dave, I would feel honored to see a Cinquain appear on Pic and Poems.

Dan Gurney said...

Kamala, you influence peer pressure--and can become very powerful peer pressure by NOT going along with meanness. Trust me on this, the real leaders are the ones who lead people away from trouble. Deep in their hearts people don't really want to ruin their lives. Life's tough enough when it's already going very well.

So, stick up for what is right. You can almost feel the energy of the earth come up through your heels and flow into your body when you do it.

The Pollinatrix said...

You've done what every great artist does at some point - you've subverted a cliche and breathed new life into it.

Dan Gurney said...

Hi Polli, thanks. It's one of those things I learned from my grandmother. It seems more like folk wisdom than a cliché per se if you'll pardon the rhyme. Anyway, it works. I usually find that when I'm irritated by someone it's because they give an outward display inner aspects of my self that I don't get along well with inside me.