Monday, December 13, 2010

Mute Muse, an Etheree*






like
concrete
kwan yin who
stands wordlessly
in the entry way
of my house, sentry fey
spirit of lovingkindness
like her, my muse is mute, guarded
as i make love, sing, dance, cook, paint, walk
eschewing idle chatter, needless talk






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*Consisting of ten lines, the Etheree poem starts with a one syllable line, then adds one syllable per line, until the last line of ten syllables for an overall syllable count of 55. In other words the syllabic structure is as follows: 1-2-3-4-5-6-7-8-9-10. It’s an uncomplicated, unpretentious form of poetry that has the quality of slowly opening, like a flower.


16 comments:

partialview said...

Inner work of a Kindergarten teacher, Dan. How very well put to describe your posts on this blog. As for Etheree, I am quite delighted at having discovered it. I have great respect for short poems. They contain all in such a small vessel.

Mute Muse is so full of pithy simplicity, it has been a delight reading it. Thank you. I'd feel better if I knew what kwan yin means, though.

Have a lovely and warm Winter Season.

Priya

Noelle Renee said...

Kwan yin is the Chinese goddess of mercy and compassion. She is also called Guanyin. I love your etheree, Dan. It is very beautiful. Thank you for sharing it. I love that you call her "sentry fey", a fairy sentry, or magical. That is lovely. You teach me something every time I read your blog. I will start commenting. I am the author of The Angels Wear Fins.
Peace,
Noelle http://theangelswearfins.blogspot.com

Bagman and Butler said...

Wonderful post...I may have to try an etheree. Actually, I may just say the word. Etheree. It has nice sound on the tongue.

steven said...

silence is a gift. words that truly describe silence - even harder to come by. steven

George said...

A lovely, meaningful poem in an interesting form, Dan. I enjoyed this very much. Merry Christmas and happy holidays to you and your family.

Lori ann said...

just beautiful.

partialview said...

Thank you, Noelle, and indeed Dan. I am on my way to try an etheree myself. The sound of it itself is so refreshing. I researched on this form and found that it is named after its creator. She was lucky to have such a soulful name!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

So beautiful and evocative, and a difficult form which you have mastered well. Lovely.

Dan Gurney said...

Partialview, Noelle told you right. Kwan Yin is a goddess of compassion. She's a good reminder to have near the entry of a house. I'm glad for you that you're going to try the Etheree form. I hope you find as much pleasure in working with it as I have.

Dan Gurney said...

Noelle, welcome to the blog. I look forward to your comments.

Dan Gurney said...

Mark, I think Butler will have more fun than Bagman with Etherees. Maybe Bagman can be allowed to put one line in.

Dan Gurney said...

Sherry Blue Sky, thanks! I feel myself to be mostly a beginner with the Etheree form. But it often works for me, so I'm happy to try my luck with it.

Dan Gurney said...

George thank you, and Merry Christmas to you and your family.

Dan Gurney said...

I'm glad you enjoyed it Lori ann

Ruth said...

I came over from Priya's after she linked you. I missed this somehow. The etheree is beautiful, the form and your version. I really do like the simplicity of it. Your muse mute is quite lyrical.

Dan Gurney said...

Thank you, Ruth. I find the Etheree a form that works well with my muse. I do find it to be a beautiful yet simple form.